Monday, October 22, 2007

Amir, Bugs Bunny and students around the world do Heckling Hare

OK, here's a quick review of some studies. I hope you don't mind if I make 'em public where other artists can benefit from your work. If so, comment and let me know and I'll take yours down.
AMIR AVNI
Amir gets high points right away for how industrious he is. He is really taking the task of improving himself seriously. He doesn't just study one cartoon once. He is doing it every day it seems, and that will put him way ahead of the competition fast.

This construction of Bugs Bunny seems overly complicated to me. Amir has added more construction lines than I did in the films. I don't know what some of them are for.
But his final drawing is excellent and shows that he is getting the message.

All the details and features of the characters are wrapped around solid 3 dimensional forms.

He also has LEFT CLEAR SPACES BETWEEN AREAS OF DETAIL- very important.

He also checks his copies carefully and critiques them. Then he draws them again to try to correct any mistakes he finds. That's the way to improve fast.





Walter

Walter's forms are a little too vague and soft. He needs to commit to the major shapes and then add stage 2, then stage 3. It kinda look like step 2 and 3 were done at the same time.

The details and wrinkles just seem to float inside the heads, instead of doing their jobs of helping to describe the features.

http://i186.photobucket.com/albums/x254/Waltezmo/comp.jpg


SOME OTHERS
This one has more commitment to the basic forms but the structure of the secondary forms is a bit wobbly. Nose is floating off to the left of the muzzle. The closed eye is not very solid. The lines around the eyes are floating around instead of describing a almond shape with a slit in the middle. The hair is not coming out of Bugs' head.


This looks like step 1 - the basic forms was pretty good, but some of the final details are breaking up the shapes of the forms-especially on the left side of the head of the dog.


To Everyone*** wrinkles, lumps and folds should not stick out from the silhouettes of your drawing! Too many lumps eats up your forms. Smooth those wrinkles out...comb the wrinkles so they look related to each other

The top of Bugs' head doesn't make sense. The hairs are cutting holes in his head instead of growing out of a solid egg shape like they should.



WIGGLY STUDIES


These are much too wiggly.
These look like the artists didn't do the drawings the way the instructions explained. They need to be much more careful and not so rushed.
The proportions marked off from Bugs head don't match. It is very easy to measure the proportions but the artist didn't here. the neck is longer than the head here. should be same length as head


More...Not bad, but the top of Bugs' head isn't connected. The left side is higher than the right. The neck is too wiggly.


The cranium is too squashed.



This one has a good feeling for solidity, structure and the details all wrap around the forms.



Yikes! to both of these...much too scratchy and lumpy


21 comments:

Kevin Langley said...

Wow, Amir's looks great. Just wanted to thank you for the critique. I totally see what your talking about. I'll take your advice and work from McKimson's stuff for awhile.

Agustin Croxatto said...

Excellent reviews!, with all the examples you did I can see where I am standing, I need a to practice a hell of a lot more!

flashcartoons said...

Thanks john for the critique, I will try to be less scratchy next time. Can't wait for your next vid!! Hope there is one soon!

Andy J. Latham said...

Thanks for the brief inclusion John, I'll have to be quicker off the mark next time to get a more detailed critique!

Sphyzex_9 said...

You should really consider starting a collge animation course. This blog has helped me more than any of my art classes ever have.

christopher said...

Here's the link to my contribution: Bugs

perry said...

john,

long time reader, first time commenter (it took me awhile to sign up for a blog). i know this is off the topic of the post, but i was wondering if you wouldn't mind helping me with a paper i'm writing. it's about bob clampett, tex avery, rod scribner, and the zaniest of the WB directors/animators and how their cartoons relate to a fine arts movement called the grotesque, which is highly dependent on imagination and breaking the boundaries of convention. since i know you're an expert, and you're my hero, i was wondering if you could help me out with it, i know you're going to have something to say, plus i was hoping you may have some ideas for articles that would help me and stuff. if you could contact me, it would be a dream come true. my email address is arppn2@umkc.edu

i really look forward to hearing from you (fingers crossed). thank you in advance!

-perry

PCUnfunny said...

Neat-o critiques. I would like to know what you thought of mine John.

Callum said...

Damn, I thought mine was pretty alright...:

http://bp3.blogger.com/_mJ4lc_Q9Q6k/Rx1Rs5ExMzI/AAAAAAAAIno/36JfTUgTtzY/s1600-h/IMG.jpg

However I have been told to trust my pencil lines more, and not to be so wishy washy when drawing. I guess it's just a habit, or maybe lack of confidence in my drawings...

Bitter Animator said...

These are great. Amir's is really solid. Remindsme of a time when the enthusiasm for the craft hadn't been sucked from my bones.

But you know what's great about these lessons, Mr.K? Maybe in five, ten or twenty years time, the people who learned from your site will be the people making cartoons. Cartoons driven by people who adore the craft would be just wonderful.

Julián höek said...

thanks a lot for the critic john!! i really apreciate it and i'll defintly work more on it!!

in you ideal cartoon school you put "application" as a class. i was wondering how would you recomend us to apply and practice further the principles lerned by these exercice so they will sink in our head better.
thanks again!!!

Dume3 said...
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Dume3 said...

Last link didn't work, let's see if this one does:


http://img156.imageshack.us/img156/9027/scan0002qv9.jpg

Art F. said...

Hello John. Here's the dog from Heckling Hare:
Dog construction

Roberto said...
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Rodrigo said...

Thanks for the feedback, John. I've revised my Bugs Bunny, trying to be more sensitive to the underlying forms. If you wish to take a gander, here 'tis:
Bugs Redux

Salud.

Dan Jackson said...

Here's my first attempt.

http://www.cityonfire.com/dano/L/Constr1.jpg

Not great, but it's a good start.
More attempts on the way.

Lynsey said...

Hi! I've made a few attempts at this lesson - it would be great if you could have a look. I'm having a bit of difficulty with them too, so I would be most grateful for a wee bit of constructive criticism

http://schazz.blogspot.com/2007/10/constructing-bugs-bunny-first-attempts.html

I've got a few other cartoon studies as recommended in you blog (and more to come). It would be equally great if you could have a look at them too!

Barbara said...

thanks for the critique John. I need a lot of practice... Now I'm off in search of some good stills.

sara valentin said...

Dog and Bugs

I should probably do this more often. I'd be very grateful for some critique. /Sara

Andy J. Latham said...

John, do you know of any DVD player software for the PC that is good at freeze-framing cartoons for study?

Most DVD players for TVs are good at it, but computer-based ones usually jump more than one frame at a time, making study difficult.

Thanks!